Thesis: As millions of Americans observe, a seemingly continuous surge of sports icons continue being questioned and prosecuted for their alleged usage of anabolic steroids. The damaging effects of these iconic athletes poor judgment, reaches much further than their careers and respected organizations, but also convey destructive and often lifetime effects onto the nations youth.
1. Introduction
a. Prevalence in Professional sports
b. Reasons for taking steroids.
c. Thesis
2. History of steroids
a. Types of steroids
b. First known use of steroids
c. When laws against steroids were implemented
3. Health factors/ side effects
a. Damaging effects that steroid use can have on an individual’s health.
b. Short and long term effects.
4. Prevalence in sports
a. Names of famous athletes who have been caught or suspected of steroid use.
b. The variety of sports it is used in.
c. Regulations that sports leagues have on steroids.
d. Statistics on usage
5. Laws and regulations against the usage of steroids.
a. National laws.
b. Regulation in sports
6. Effects on youth
a. Children who idolize sports stars who abuse steroids
b. The public’s view of steroids
c. The number of high school students who abuse steroids
7. Ways to prevent steroid use
a. Current laws
b. Banning those who choose to use
c. Testing in sports leagues
d. Jail time for athletes who abuse steroids
8. Conclusion
a. Restate thesis
b. Discuss the need for banning steroid
c. Optimistic look towards sports without steroid abuse
Drew Weinbrecht
Nice outline! Gotta give ya some "contructive criticism" though! In your thesis the first comma in the second sentence isn't neccessary I don't think b/c it seperates the subject from the verb. Also, the inorder for the second comma to be correct, I think you need to add a subject to make it an independent clause.
ReplyDeletegood outline! maybe you could include an example of an athlete? that would be good evidence
ReplyDeleteIt looks pretty good. When you talk about laws and regulations you might want to talk about why people can get away with not following them, like are there loopholes or are they not strictly enforced?
ReplyDeletegreat outline. I agree with collin, you definitely could include some examples or use one specific athlete to focus on but besides that you have a great path for this essay.
ReplyDeleteYou have a great outline. You may also want to put more evidence and greater detail also into the outline.
ReplyDeleteI don't really know how to comment on this outline. Since you didn't use complete sentences, I have to assume that I know what you are arguing.
ReplyDeleteYour thesis is directed towards the influence on youth that professional althetes' steroid use has, but your outline, except in section six, doesn't talk about this. Get your thesis and paper on one accord.
-Candace