Thesis: There are roughly 100,000 people waiting on the United States organ transplant waiting list and some of those people are saved, but many are lost. Many Americans are afraid to donate their organs because of myths they have heard, but organ donation isn't as bad as it seems.
Proposal:
I plan to research information about the myths of organ donation. I want to clear the myths. I also would like to talk about the statistics. For instance, how many people are on the waiting list, how many get transplants each your, and how many people are actually organ donors. Since most of the opt-out system information was about the United Kingdom I would still like to mention the few things that I came across about the United States and opt-out system. I was also noticed that I left some people hanging and they didn't know what my topic actually meant. An opt-out sytem is when you are consider at birth to be an organ donor and you can request to be a non-donor. An opt-in system is what we have now and is just the opposite, your request to be a donor. Many people don't sign up because of reasons such as myths because some people also think "Oh, I don't need to plenty of people already are," which will be the angle that I would like to bring in this topic. I would also like to explain how to donate organs since the U.S. doesn't have an opt-out system. The reasoning behind me wanting to do this topic is because I have been effected by organ donation.
So the main points will be:
* Statistics
*Myths
*Opt-in Systems
*Explain how to donate
Introduction:
Many people die waiting for organ transplants because there is a lack of organs and lack of people who are willing to donate their organs. The need for organ donations is constantly rising and it is so simple to become an organ donor. Many people are often discouraged to donate their organs because of myths they have encounterd. There are roughly 100,000 people waiting on the United States organ transplant waiting list and some of those people are saved, but many are lost. Many Americans are afraind to donate their organs because of myths they have heard, but organ donation isn't as bad as it seems.
Conclusion:
Being an organ donor can make a big difference, and not just to one person. Someone can save up to as many as 50 lives by donating their organs. Now, that it is clear that the myths aren't true why wouldn't someone donate their organs after they die.
Sources:
“Donation Basics.” 2008. Lifeshare of the Carolinas. 18 Nov 2008. <http://www.lifesharecarolinas.org/basics/basics_index.cfm>
“Donation Basics.” 17 Nov 2008. Organ Donor. 18 Nov 2008.
Mayo Clinic Staff, "Organ Donation: Don't Let This 10 Myths Confuse You". 4 Apr 2008. Mayo Foundation for Medical Education and Research. 18 Nov 2008.
“Transplantation.” 2008. National Kidney Foundation. 18 Nov 2008.
“Understanding Donation.” LifeSource Organ and Tissue Donation. 18 Nov 2008.< http://www.life-source.org/about/index.shtml>
very cool topic! two "suggestions" :) misspelled "afraid" in the intro paragraph. Also I don't understand the last sentence of your proposal.
ReplyDeleteI like where your topic is going. However, you need to make your argument clear. It's unclear what you're actually going to ask people to do/ who you're speaking to. But this is definitely a good start and I like where your heads at. Your thesis needs to be a little more direct though.
ReplyDeleteI think in your thesis, you should change the phrase "organ donation isn't as bad as it seems." It sounds kind of weak this way and doesn't really encourage people to give their organs.
ReplyDeleteI'm also confused if you want people to give organs while they are alive or donate their organs after they die.
I think its really cool that you are doing something that personally affected you! Thats a good persuasive tool.
That is a really great topic, especially since it is obviously something you identify with. I think your introduction and proposal would be stronger if you maybe identified some of the myths and only focused on a few. That would narrow your topic and really show the direction of the paper. Are you including any personal information?
ReplyDeleteAn idea would be to talk about the privatization of organ donations. We spoke briefly in my economics class about the effects that high demand with low supply of organs has. Nice choice of topic should be interesting to clear up the myths.
ReplyDeleteDrew Weinbrecht
Great topic, I think the number you put in the thesis draws the readers attention. I think you try to shorten your topic and find a certain topic to follow.
ReplyDeleteOne myth my friend strongly believes in is that medics and EMS will not put forth their full effort in saving you because you're an organ donor and they want to give your organs away. Maybe you could prove that myth wrong then I can show my friend your paper and make him become an organ donor
ReplyDeleteInteresting topic. I agree that the phrase "organ donation isn't as bad as it seems" can be replaced with something that is more inviting, or doesn't make donating organs sound so bad. Also, I agree that you should narrow your topic a little more.
ReplyDeleteReally really neat topic. I definitely agree with Sarah and that the phrase 'isn't as bad as it seems' needs to be much more in depth and stronger or replaced. I really like your proposal.
ReplyDeleteThank you for clearing up your proposal from earlier! I could only guess what an opt-out system was. I think you've done a good job selecting your topic and since you've widened your topic a little it should be easier to write on. You could also include popular refrences to organ donation in both good and bad lights. Like the movie "John Q" in support of donation.
ReplyDeleteSince you have been involved with organ donation, it would be appropriate to include a narrative if you wanted to. It could be from the first or third person point of view. It could be absolute fact or based on real events. It could take up a paragraph before the introduction or two sentences of the conclusion. You have a lot of options here.
ReplyDeleteHave you found the visual rhetoric that you will talk about in the paper?
-Candace