Topic: Are parents to blame for childhood obesity?
Thesis: In the United States the rate of childhood obesity is increasing rapidly due to the unhealthy decisions made by parents who lack time, money, and proper eating habits.
This is a good topic! It will be interesting to see what kind of information you come across because this is definitely a growing problem! The only "constructive criticism" I have is what points are you going to talk about, specifically? Other than that, I can't wait to see what all you find out about it!
THis is a great topic to write about but is too broad. Maybe your thesis could include a few statistics about the rate that obesity is increasing, or go into more depth as to reasons. It just is too general and doesnt really show a point.
Really good topic. I'm glad to see some talking about the other side of the "scale." Great thesis statment too because it provides a outline of where the paper could possible go and it gives an agrument too.
Like the rest said, great topic. I like the fact that you are not making it a broad topic of just obesity but more centered around childhood obesity. This is definatly a main concern facing a lot of young children and must be discussed.
Be wary of finding The Cause of childhood obesity. Chances are there are multiple influences. You can briefly mention a few of the other influences but focus on the parental influence.
You'll need more to talk about than parents lacking "time, money, and proper eating habits." I sure there are more interesting points you can make about parental complicity in childhood obesity. Really, how much money do you need to keep a child from overeating and make them play outside on Saturdays? That's free.
This is a good topic! It will be interesting to see what kind of information you come across because this is definitely a growing problem! The only "constructive criticism" I have is what points are you going to talk about, specifically? Other than that, I can't wait to see what all you find out about it!
ReplyDeleteTHis is a great topic to write about but is too broad. Maybe your thesis could include a few statistics about the rate that obesity is increasing, or go into more depth as to reasons. It just is too general and doesnt really show a point.
ReplyDeleteReally good topic. I'm glad to see some talking about the other side of the "scale." Great thesis statment too because it provides a outline of where the paper could possible go and it gives an agrument too.
ReplyDeleteLike the rest said, great topic. I like the fact that you are not making it a broad topic of just obesity but more centered around childhood obesity. This is definatly a main concern facing a lot of young children and must be discussed.
ReplyDeleteThis is a really interesting topic! I think it's good that while you put the responsibility on the parents, you also look at why they do what they do.
ReplyDeleteBe wary of finding The Cause of childhood obesity. Chances are there are multiple influences. You can briefly mention a few of the other influences but focus on the parental influence.
ReplyDeleteYou'll need more to talk about than parents lacking "time, money, and proper eating habits." I sure there are more interesting points you can make about parental complicity in childhood obesity. Really, how much money do you need to keep a child from overeating and make them play outside on Saturdays? That's free.
-Candace