Topic: The effect of violence on kids in video games
Thesis: Violence in games, although some studies show that it has negative effect, is not bad for kids who play them.
...I'm not to good at writing thesis statements...any help would be appreciated...
Ryan Upham
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Hey man I would say that you need to be more specific in your thesis. State the reasons why you believe that violence in the games isn't bad for kids. Let the reader know what points you are going to make in your paper so they know what they are looking for. I'm not very good at writing thesis statements either but I hope this helps you out some.
ReplyDeleteRyan,
ReplyDeleteYou're on the right track for a topic, but you should have some evidence for the facts you bring up. Your thesis should show some direction and specific details that will show exactly where your argument is leading. Remember, your thesis should be a "roadmap" for you paper, so your thesis is a short preview of what the rest of your paper is talking about. Your thesis should give the audience your opinion and exactly where you stand with the issue. Hope this helps man.
when you write your thesis you should be more direct about what you plan on writting about. its basically like a quick summarization of what your paper is about.
ReplyDeleteThe thing that helped me the most with writing a thesis statement was making sure to give an almost outline of what you will be discussing. Your thesis should briefly state the points that you will be writing the rest of your paper on. I would talk about your reasons that playing video games are not bad for kids.
ReplyDeleteYea be more direct, and show points to proving why video games are not bad. What you have now is a great start, but no one knows how your going to show that they aren't bad. So just add specific reasons in your thesis and you should be good with it.
ReplyDeleteGreat comments.
ReplyDelete-Candace