Topic: Race and Ethnicity Conflicts in America
Thesis: Race and Ethnicity has been the root of several conflicts in American history, varying from holidays, churches, wars, and many other inconsistencies that have been the rebuttal of the current society.
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Race and ethnicity are always a good topic to research since there has been so much stuff throughout history; however, you topic is very broad. I would try to narrow it down to one or two specfic conflicts to research. That will make your thesis a little more clear and precise on where the paper is going. You can always tie in other ones, but overall, thats a great topic! You should find a lot of information.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very good topic and would be very interesting to read the paper about but your thesis does not really tell the reader what you are going to talk about. It is too general and does not give enough specifics to exactly your point.
ReplyDeleteI think this is a good topic to focus on, but I agree that it still seems pretty broad. You might want to just focus on wars and civil rights movements. Holidays, churches, and wars don't seem to tie together as much.
ReplyDeleteAlso the phrase "other inconsistencies" is pretty vague. It should definitely be an interesting paper though.
I dont actually understand your thesis. I agree with everyone so far that you have a strong topic, but it's a bit too broad, and I think that made you have to write a more vague thesis. What is "the rebuttal of society?"
ReplyDeleteThis is an interesting topic for me, but it does need to be focused somehow. You could look at a specific historical conflict and talk about how it shaped history, and its effects today. Or you could talk about modern, slightly more subtle racial conflicts and prejudices. The thesis statement itself could be improved. The first half of it before the first comma is good. I would suggest that after that, you explain whatever specific conflict you are going to address.
ReplyDeleteGreat comments. Good eye, R. Warren. You are right. A broad topic produced a vague thesis statement. Brittany, I think you feel the need to research everything and teach it all back to us. I have this urge a lot when it comes to topics I care about. I would much rather you talk deeply about one or two specific points, than talk briefly about twenty generic points. Start over. Do the web bubble exercise that we did in class. Rethink your topic and thesis and post it again with your proposal.
ReplyDelete-Candace