Topic-Sex Education: Where and how ,if at all, should it be conducted?
Thesis- Sex education is put off by most parents because of discomfort and lack of knowledge. Young adults are usually educated through media and friends which can give them false information.
Larina Daniels
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I like the topic, but the thesis is a little confusing as to where this argument is going from here. If you are going to say facts such as these in your thesis, you should add evidence to support these as well. You should also try to include the idea in which you are trying to get across in your paper. Which side are you on? Where are you going with this? These are some questions in which I should not be asking after reading your thesis. Good start though.
ReplyDeleteOne part of your thesis that I think could be tweaked is where it says lack of knowledge, I think you could say something along the lines of ineffective communication. Most parents know the stuff, just not how to share it.
ReplyDeleteI really like your topic but I question you will be able to write enough on the topic. Also, the conclusion drawn seems too obvious and I am not quite sure the direction in which the paper will go.
ReplyDeleteI really like you topic, but what is your thesis? I don't really understand the argument you are trying to make. But if you make it more obvious I think this would be a super interesting paper
ReplyDeleteI like your topic a lot. I think this is a subject that does not get enough attention. For your thesis I would make sure to give more of a road map of what your main points will be and be more clear of what your stance on it is.
ReplyDeleteGreat choice of topic, but your thesis statment doesn't really have an agrument. Maybe in your thesis you could state which side you are for to give it more of an agrument.
ReplyDeleteGood topic, but I think your thesis statement might need a little work. Try to specify what you are going to be discussing and analyzing in your actual paper.
ReplyDeleteGreat comments. Aboyd sums up the biggest issue with your post: there is no argument. You don't have to be for or against anything in your paper, but you can. You choose a pro or con stance or you can develop your opinion opinion about this topic. For example, you could explore the arguments on both sides but argue that there should be an age requirement for sex education.
ReplyDelete-Candace