Topic: steroids in baseball
Thesis: Baseball has been the American past time for over one hundred years, yet recently players have made people question the integrity of the game. the players who choose to cheat and use illegal substances affect the game itself, the young kids who idolize these players and most of all themselves.
its just a start. Marc Kelley
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Steroid use in baseball is a really broad topic with a lot of information. Maybe try picking one specific aspect steriods affect in baseball from the list you provided at the end of your thesis.
ReplyDeleteMarc - This topic is entirely too broad. Your wording is confusing and unnecessary. The thesis is unclear and I have no idea what direction the paper is going in. Also, This topic is overused.
ReplyDeleteSteroids in baseball is a good topic but I'm not really sure where your going with this thesis. With the thesis your paper could be sooo long because of all the different points so maybe you should try to narrow it down to one specific thing about steroids and baseball.
ReplyDelete...This seems like it is way to broad...You could probably get away with talking about one of the smaller bubble topics that were up on the board when we did this in class.....
ReplyDeleteMarc, how can you post this vague topic when the whole class narrowed it down for you?
ReplyDeleteStart over. Rethink your topic and thesis and post it again with your proposal.
-Candace