Topic- Child Soldiers: What they Suffer and Why Reintegrating them into Society is so Difficult
Thesis- Child soldiers are exploited in the worst possible ways, but the reintegration process is complex and demanding for children who have experienced such traumatic events in their short lifetime.
The topic sounds good Em! It will probably work into your paper with the introduction, but the only thing I see if maybe you could add a little more detail. For example, stating a country that uses child soldiers or how they are exploited.
Great topic but I feel you need to be more specific and focus more on a main point. I am also confused about what you mean by the "integration process". That seems too vague
If you are going to talk about ways the children are exploited and experiences they go through that are traumatic in your paper, you may want to list a few of them in the thesis to give it more outline and direction. Otherwise, great thesis and I think this is a very interesting topic!
It seems to me that you plan to talk about how difficult it is to rehabilitate these kids. Like Ashley Epperson and Awilliams, I would like some context established in the introduction. What is war and rehab like for them? What are some facts and statistics? What is the reasoning behind this practice? What are some of the countries that practice it? Tell us what we need to know, so that we can fully appreciate your paper.
AW would like you to define exactly what you mean by reintegration. This could be brief, if you are going to get more heavily into the topic soon in the paper.
The topic sounds good Em! It will probably work into your paper with the introduction, but the only thing I see if maybe you could add a little more detail. For example, stating a country that uses child soldiers or how they are exploited.
ReplyDelete-Ashley Epperson
Great topic but I feel you need to be more specific and focus more on a main point. I am also confused about what you mean by the "integration process". That seems too vague
ReplyDeleteIf you are going to talk about ways the children are exploited and experiences they go through that are traumatic in your paper, you may want to list a few of them in the thesis to give it more outline and direction. Otherwise, great thesis and I think this is a very interesting topic!
ReplyDeleteIt seems to me that you plan to talk about how difficult it is to rehabilitate these kids. Like Ashley Epperson and Awilliams, I would like some context established in the introduction. What is war and rehab like for them? What are some facts and statistics? What is the reasoning behind this practice? What are some of the countries that practice it? Tell us what we need to know, so that we can fully appreciate your paper.
ReplyDeleteAW would like you to define exactly what you mean by reintegration. This could be brief, if you are going to get more heavily into the topic soon in the paper.
-Candace